Congratulations to Wynter R., for her Runner-Up award in the May Editors’ Choice Awards! Check out her article and its analysis below.
Vertical: Accident & Personal Injury Attorneys
Keyword: personal injury lawyer
This article does a great job incorporating citations to help bolster its authority. Citations are only necessary when information couldn’t be verified quickly on its own, and in this article some pretty big claims are being made, so having credible citations to other sources ensures the audience knows the points in the article are valid and well researched. Each of the supporting points has a clear connection to the article’s purpose, which may seem small but does a lot when it comes to showcasing a writer’s expertise.
The article’s title is straightforward and clear and so are each of the section headings. While the only standard for headings is that they be parallel, in this case the full sentence headings make for a very scannable and accessible article. There’s no doubt in the reader’s mind what the article will be about and what each section elaborates on. And of course there’s always a concern for legal articles to rely on legal terminology or convoluted language, but there are no such issues in this case. The writer did a great job explaining to a non-specialized audience how leaving a child in a car could lead to legal issues.
The article’s organization helps increase the readability and overall the flow is smooth. The writer made a great choice providing context for hot car deaths in the first couple sections, and knowing that information makes the rest of the article all the more powerful. The article would have been much less effective had the three sections been rearranged in a different way.
As summer approaches, this type of article is more timely than ever. It tackles an ever present and serious issue and many people are not likely familiar with the legal repercussions of forgetting a child in a car even if they have heard of such stories. The context provided in the first two sections acts as a great segue into the explanation of the legal ramifications of these situations, and it’s clear throughout the article that all of the sections have clear connections to each other and the controlling idea.
This article’s controlling idea is particularly well received namely because the supporting points are so strongly shared. Instead of simply saying someone could maybe be charged with a crime for forgetting a child in a hot car, it goes over a number of circumstances that could apply in that situation. The difference between a controlling that’s generally acceptable and one that goes above and beyond is how well the writer frames the article’s purpose and then supports it. By clearly outlining the controlling idea and addressing such a specific situation, the rest of the article needed to follow suit in specificity, which it did.